T1+Persuade

__**Monday 14th March**__
L.I. We are learning make content relevant and add weight to argument by having an effective position statement, main points, evidence and restatement. Contain elaboration of main points.  E ffective position statement: S.C. we can

• make our position and purpose clear  • use a rhetorical question   • include a list of fact/evidence that will be discussed in writing   • restatement, elaboration of main points  S.C. We Can

• restate my position throughout my writing  • make a main point and back it up with evidence or statistic

__Monday 14th March__
Extended Morning Tea.  Tauranga 30 18th Ave Tauranga intermediate school  Dear Mr Diver I think that your idea of having an extended morning tea last Friday was an excellent idea. I believe continuing to have an  extended morning Tea would be great for all the kids and teachers in Tauranga Intermediate School. wouldn’t you like an extended morning tea? There are a number of reasons that we should continue to have this treat like, The teachers will be more happier, The kids will concentrate and there will be a change of behaviour in the kids.  There are a lot of children that get into class and have not had enough fresh air at morning tea, So continuing to have a  longer morning tea would help all the children to concentrated and learn more in block 2 and the rest of the day.  Also all the teachers will concentrate and teach well because “they” have had fresh air and will be more enthusiastic and happy  around all the kids and will do their jobs well. When all the kids come into class they normally don’t do their work and are not disciplined. But if you give them a treat on  every Friday morning tea, then maybe the kids will come straight into class, sit down and do their work when they are told.  So that is why I think that Tauranga intermediate school should continue on having an extended morning tea.  Your sincerely Anna Aldersley

__**Monday 11 April 2011**__ <span style="font: normal normal normal 20px/normal 'Arial Rounded MT Bold'; letter-spacing: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-top: 0px;">nuclear power - Against

<span style="font: normal normal normal 14px/normal 'Arial Rounded MT Bold'; letter-spacing: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-top: 0px;">Some people believe that a Nuclear power station would be great for New Zealand... but not me, I believe having wind powered electricity and solar power would be more reliable and trust worthy. Would you like New Zealand to end up like Japan? I know I wouldn’t. There are a whole lot of rezones that we, New zealanders should not get a Nuclear power station, it can course cancer, radiation waste and the reactor could blow up and kill people close to the station.

<span style="font: normal normal normal 14px/normal 'Arial Rounded MT Bold'; letter-spacing: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-top: 0px;">Radioactive waste is quite a bad thing, if you have seen what it has done to Japan you will no what I mean. Radiation waste is a waste artifact containing radioactive material. some radiation waste can remain dangerous for thousands of years. methods of disposal contain dropping concrete-encased containers filled with radiation waste in the sea and burying the waste underground in old salt mines.

<span style="font: normal normal normal 14px/normal 'Arial Rounded MT Bold'; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 16px; margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-top: 0px;">According to some people, Radiation waste courses cancer and deaths. If a cell becomes mutated or changed, this mutation can cause the cell to die, or it can cause the number of cell to increase rapidly, leading to cancer. People who live close to radioactive waste, have a greater chance of getting a cancerous disease, then those who don’t live near one.

<span style="font: normal normal normal 14px/normal 'Arial Rounded MT Bold'; letter-spacing: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-top: 0px;">The risk of a power plant malfunction can be found out by a scientific report called a probabilistic risk analysis which is done for the cost of $5 million. This is an expensive cost and may not be able to be covered by the government. These reports have concluded that 2 in every 3 melt-downs there would be no deaths, in 1 out of 5 there would be over 1000 deaths, and in 1 out of 100,000 there would be 50,000 deaths. These deaths are a huge factor when creating nuclear power plants.

<span style="font: normal normal normal 14px/normal 'Arial Rounded MT Bold'; letter-spacing: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-top: 0px;">So that is why I think getting a nuclear power station in New Zealand is a wrong thing to do because of those three and a whole lot more, I think sticking with our power choices is a great thing to do.

Good start with persuasive writing, you have made your position clear & used a rhetorical question in your opening paragraph. Focus on completing all paragraphs outlined at the beginning.